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高一英语作文 Love Around Me 我身边的爱

时间:2017-11-13 18:51  作者:David  来源:本站整理

 我们的生活中处处充满着爱,有父母的爱,有老师的爱,有同学的爱,有朋友的爱….请以"Love Around Me(我身边的爱)"为题,写一篇短文.内容要点如下:
爱你的人 爱的表现
父母         为你做早餐;送你上学…
老师         传授知识;照顾你…
同学         一起学习;和睦相处…
朋友         在网上交流;分享快乐与烦恼…
写作要求:1.根据表格提示父母的爱、老师的爱、同学的爱和朋友的爱都要写齐.
2.词数90词左右,不得出现真实姓名、校名.
参考词汇:receive love; get on…with; chat online.
Love Around Me
 There is lots of love around me in my everyday life.(文章开门见山,直入话题)Every day I can receive love from my parents,my teachers,my classmates and my friends.(本句是正文内容的总述,下文一次介绍了父母、老师、同学和朋友的爱,文章采用"总﹣分﹣总"的模式叙述) In the morning,my lovely mother cooks delicious food for me.Then my father drives me to school.At school all the teachers not only look after me well but also teach me lots of useful knowledge.(高分句型一)My dear classmates and I study together happily,getting on well with each other.(高分句型二)I chat online with friends in my spare time.They often share my pleasure and trouble.I often feel happy and excited when I get love from them.I make a decision to study hard and make great progress.Here,I should say to them."Thank you for all your love."(结尾处画龙点睛,抒发了爱给我带来的动力和愉快的生活) .
【分析】本篇书面表达属于图表类作文,根据提示信息我们的生活中处处充满着爱,有父母的爱,有老师的爱,有同学的爱,有朋友的爱….请以"Love Around Me(我身边的爱)"为题,写一篇短文 写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,要点包括:爱你的人和爱的表现2、图表是文章的总体框架,要在图表的范围内进行分析、构思和想象.要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写.本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写.3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态.4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点.
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,层次分明,而且使用了多种表达:not only,but also不仅,而且;get on well with与…相处;in my spare time在空闲时间;in my spare time做决定; make great progress取得巨大进步;
At school all the teachers not only look after me well but also teach me lots of useful knowledge.(高分句型一)
My dear classmates and I study together happily,getting on well with each other.(高分句型二)
【解答】Love Around Me
       There is lots of love around me in my everyday life.(文章开门见山,直入话题) Every day I can receive love from my parents,my teachers,my classmates and my friends.(本句是正文内容的总述,下文一次介绍了父母、老师、同学和朋友的爱,文章采用"总﹣分﹣总"的模式叙述) In the morning,my lovely mother cooks delicious food for me.Then my father drives me to school.At school all the teachers not only look after me well but also teach me lots of useful knowledge.(高分句型一)My dear classmates and I study together happily,getting on well with each other.(高分句型二)I chat online with friends in my spare time.They often share my pleasure and trouble.I often feel happy and excited when I get love from them.I make a decision to study hard and make great progress.Here,I should say to them."Thank you for all your love."(结尾处画龙点睛,抒发了爱给我带来的动力和愉快的生活)
【点评】英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题.它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力.在撰写时要注意主谓语一致,时态呼应,用词贴切等.要提高英语写作水平,需要两方面的训练:一是语言基础方面的训练,要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功,即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子;二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧.

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