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2016普陀区中考一模英语作文 去英国游学选择怎样的住家

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Suppose your school is organizing a study trip to Britain. What kind of host family would you like to live with? And why? Write a composition in at least 60 words according to the situation give.(假如你们学校正在组织一次去英国的游学活动,你想选择怎样的住家?为什么?

请根据所给情景写一篇不少于60 词的短文)

(注意:文中不得出现任何姓名校名及其它相关信息,否则不予评分。)


题目解析

STEP ONE: 审题

1.审体裁

夹叙夹议。既要表明自己想要的住家的特点,又要说明原因。

2.审人称和时态

写本人的喜好,故应为第一人称

时态以一般现在时和一般将来时为主

3.审要点

你想要什么样的住家?

你为什么想要这样的住家?

对游学生活有何期待?

STEP TWO: 写作模板

1.开头

引出话题,表明要去英国游学,希望可以住到怎样的住家。

2.中间

1.期待的住家是什么样子的

2.为什么会有这样的要求和期待

3.这样的住家可以给你带来什么

3.结尾

呼应开头,重申对游学以及对住家的期待

STEP THREE: 可用素材

1.词汇

atmosphere, scenery, view, location, pollution 等

2.词组、句式

look forward to, in my opinion, as far as I am concerned 等

3.名人名言

A wish or desire accompanied by confident expectation of its fulfillment 等

4.连接词

firstly, secondly, in addition, to conclude, what’s more 等

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范文点评

A host family that I want

It is really a surprise when I know that I could take a study trip to Britain and live in a host family during these days. As far as I am concerned, I would prefer a host family that have a beautiful scenery and students of my age.

Firstly, I believe a wonderful scenery is of great importance for my study there, both physically and mentally.

I could breathe the fresh air and enjoy 2016普陀区中考一模英语作文 去英国游学选择怎样的住家the comfortable breeze with my friends. Secondly, I am really looking forward to making friends with British students who are of similar age and had many interesting things to talk about.

To conclude, I hope I could not only learn a lot of knowledge but also make many friends during this study trip.

精彩亮点分析:

亮点一:It 做形式主语,避免了句子头重脚轻的问题。宾语从句的套用使句子逻辑清晰,句式较高级。

亮点二:全文巧用“firstly, secondly, to conclude” 等连接词,把对住家的两大期待即环境优美和有同龄学生的要求清晰罗列出来,文章结构明朗,使阅卷老师一目了然。

亮点三:be of great importance 善用名词结构,避免了使用较频繁的be important。

亮点四:both physically and mentally,巧用副词,使句子简约高端。

亮点五:全文多次出现宾语从句、定语从句和状语从句等,使文章层次分明且增加了文采分。


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